Vlad - Opening chapter (partial)

Alright, here for you to tear apart, is the partial opening chapter of my novel, Vlad. Some of this you have read before, but this is the first time it's been put together. Now, if you read it, PLEASE comment, say anything, even if you hate it. I really want to get this book finished and published before the characters live another ten years with me (do you know how annoying it is to have perverted brothers in your head?).

( Vlad: Opening Chapter )

(The sad fact, within these scenes, you've been introduced to all of the main characters by sight or name).